My Son The Sun

My son is the sun, heir to the air
I listen to him hum a hymn
To see him happy is my life’s wish
Like pouring a kettle of love to the brim

Truly, he is one who won my heart
I wipe a tear of joy from my eye
No prophet who could profit more
Just from having him nearby

My son, my sun, could’ve chosen any mum
So thank you for choosing me
My son, my sun
Your Ma loves you eternally

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– Cronin Detzz  (c) 2015

Don’t Confuse Mystery with Confusion

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I started two books this week, one by a cyber thriller writer and another by a world famous sci-fi writer.

The cyber thriller had confusing dialog where I wasn’t always certain who was speaking. There was also too much telling and not enough showing. I couldn’t finish it.

The science fiction piece was confusing because it wasn’t until the beginning of the inciting event that I realized the main character was a female. This writer’s main characters are usually male.

I know we want to avoid too much backstory, but I think we want to have mystery, not confusion.

Keep writing and keep sharing! – Cronin Detzz

TWAS BRILLIG: You Only Have 3 Lines!

You only have about 3 lines to grab your reader by his heartstrings. MAKE THEM COUNT-HERE’S HOW:

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Whether it is a poem or a blog post, the same 3-lines rule applies.

If you’re writing a poem and the title is not crucial, omit it. Yes, I know it’s like leaving the hospital without naming your newborn, but you need the first 3 lines to be phenomenal. If  the first few lines aren’t stunning, you run the risk of a reader flipping past your post.

On certain sites like Google Plus and Facebook, the reader only sees the first few lines.

I have rewritten poems with the specific intent of putting my best 3 lines at the top. Put your best foot forward, so to speak!

Look at these amazing first lines from some talented poets:
“Because I could not stop for death” – Emily Dickinson
“O, captain, my captain! Our fearful trip is done.” – Walt Whitman
“Once upon a midnight dreary while I pondered weak and weary” – Edgar Allan Poe
“Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe” – Lewis Carroll

If you’re writing a blog post, you will focus more on the title. One of my most popular blog posts was entitled “Grammatically Correct Frankenstein.” I believe it was a hit because of the silliness in the title.

Poems and blogs should feature a captivating picture. People who use social media are highly visual people.

Does this help you? Let me know.

Keep writing and keep sharing! – Cronin Detzz