I’m enjoying a book with a great plot. Sorta.
I wish I could have been a beta reader for the author, before he published his book, so that I could show him his redundant phrases. It’s irksome.
The writing is similar to this:
His eyes were bloodshot from lack of sleep. His team was worried about his exhausted appearance. He rubbed his eyes. They were red.
Are there certain phrases you could tighten up? A common novice mistake is inefficiency.
He rubbed his bloodshot eyes, hoping his team wouldn’t notice.
Heres a link for more tips on efficient writing (caveat: I don’t always agree with taboo phrases, but this post gives you the general idea):
Keep writing and keep sharing! – Cronin Detzz